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I have been here before,
a long time ago,
when we were happy,
and we swear our love.

Love was our fuel,
it ended dying with our last kiss,
not matter what i did,
you ended forgetting bout me.

You were my hope,
my light in the dark,
a sweet sound to make me shine,
i cant believe that you send me to fly.

Why you let me alone in the dark,
wasn't I enough for you?
or simple you never loved me enough?
i will never know why left me out of your life.

Have you think about me?
have you missed me?
have you ever wish for me?
have you been love as i loved you with all my will?

You and only you will cure my heart,
longing for you my sickness has become,
in words i try to hide even if it is never enough,
i will run as far as i can just to escape from your eyes.

Forsaken in this place i am,
not a man but a doll of what i was,
a shadow just hiding in the dark,
how fool i have been to give you my all.

Me, I and myself all of us love you as well,
pretty feelings i try to write,
sadly hate is all i have,
do you hate me as well? or is for my sake that you smile?

Today is valentine,
you come to me in a flash,
what you expect? what you want?
i will never get you,
you put me aside but wanting me in your side,
you want me to take care of you but who is there to take care of me?
is it selfishness? or pure love? do you deny yourself? or want to indulge for your sake?

You have come to me,
I cant deny i love you with all my might,
is this what you want for me?
what you expect from my soul?
I can tell you one thing that is not a lie,
Want to hold you so tight for the rest of my life.

Have you seen what i hide in this?
a secret is in this poem for those who know where to look,
it ain't hard is at plain sight,
see it, read it, believe it.

Come tell me what you expect,
is it true that you want me?
or is it my mind,
trapped in a make believe.

To you who in my heart live
i must ask, is it cold or warm?
i don't know what to do,
since you who live in my heart is what make me smile.

Me miss you,
me need you,
me want you,
me hope for you.

Do you miss me?
do you need me?
do you want me?
do you want me to hope for you?

You make me change of heart,
as a child who change of plans,
one day i hate you
one day i want you.

Missing you is how i live,
hating you is how i breath,
getting away is what i try,
but loving you will always be in my mind.

Me? i am just a simple fool,
a lord of nothing,
endless traveler of space,
trying to find me place.

Have you found a place?
oh darling i want to be there,
in that place that you just found,
where our hearts can join in love.

You just you is what i want,
i long for you with all my might
is this being in love
or a shadow of what it was?

Think is what i do,
and i can't believe,
i never do enough,
to from my mind,
blow you away,
why you keep getting in my way?

About a long lost love,
i can say i have never wish you wrong,
if you find us in a log,
i hope you know is from when i love you a lot.

Me is tired of words saying,
words that you ignore as they pass,
do you think i don't know,
that when i leave you hate me with all your soul?

Tell the wind about us,
a long lost love,
blame the sea, blame the speed,
but never blame us, for what we lost.

Me is still in here,
in a lil cage waiting for seeds,
seeds of pain is what i get,
but i only ask for your sake.

The ugly truth is that i miss you,
i have to fight it on every mission,
is my weakness and my strength,
is my hope and my death.

Truth is i don't wanna hate you,
truth is hate is all you have left me,
truth is i love you,
truth is you don't.

Do you notice what i told you before,
of the secret behind this notes,
fast they come and fast they go
but have you find,
what i wanted you to know?

You; how much i have wrote this word,
no worry the end is near nor is important in itself,
what truly matter is that you have read with your soul,
do you think i deserved some more?

Need that is something everyone share,
the need for love, the need for hate,
we humans are so alike, but not me i am special in one way,
i have the need for you,
and that makes me cry.

Me? is writing, me is thinking,
this is the last, the most epic,
not is not, truth be said it long lost is power,
i don't care, i don't mind i only wanted to make you smile......
i would love some feedback on this piece, but please leave out that is long is on purpose but on the other hand, i wanna know about my grammar, punctuation, usage of word as well if the rhymes work ^^
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Edit: There is a hidden message and because who is meant for i highly doubt will find it here i will let the DA community know where is it, read the first word of every stanza and beside that read the whole first sentence as well is a 2 in 1 deal was hard to do but i love his effect after you read the poem and read the messages i think they add a huge impact to the whole concept ^^
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Seigner Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome poem, very intense and emotive. :thumbsup:
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darkraike Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
thank you a lot ^^
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Seigner Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome
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azumishi Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2010
this was beautifull, it has so much feeling. i loved every letter of it.
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darkraike Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
glad you enjoyed it ^^!
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ladyjinx13 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2010
Beautiful,clever and I love it x
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darkraike Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
glad to know so :]! it has been my most complex work so far, you read it in the 3 ways is supposed to? the regular way, the one word way and the one sentence way?
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reginadiedraghi Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2010
oh my god! :jawdrop: how were you managed to rhym the first words to form that sentence?
this peice is amazing, i love how emotional it is. but you have a few mistakes in verbs forms. other than that it's gorgeous
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darkraike Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
thank you a lot, well saddly english is only my second language so i know i have some verb errors if you could poin them :] i could perhaps fix them, and did you read the first sentence of every stanza in order? and the first words as well? do it you will have a surprsie
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reginadiedraghi Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
you're welcome and i know what you mean, english is my second as well. i'll note you with the errors.
and i did read the first word, but i must read the first sentece now :XD:
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